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Tuesday, 16 June 2020

Narrative


It was a warm dreamy morning in Los Angeles Crenshaw .  

A youthful tenager called Ermais was rocking to school in light of the fact that he was going to sell some rap taps at school. 

Ermais rocked in like Will Smith's first day in Bel Air. Sony, his best friend, was getting out of his mum's hammerhead looking car while she was screamy at him. 



here is a snip of my narrative, please remeber to leave a comment. 

7 comments:

  1. this is amazing nate but maybe fix it soon.

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  2. Good job Nate this is very funny and creative I really like it Next time you could make your description with a little bit more information in it keep up the good work:)

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  3. Hi Nate I like your snippet for your narrative I can't wait to see it.

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  4. nice work Nate i like how you set the seen keep up the good work

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  5. Hi Nate,
    This sounds great, I love the references!
    Maybe next time you could add more information into the description?
    But well done I can´t wait to read more!

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  6. Hi Nate,
    This is really good. Keep writing, I would love to know what happens next.

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